Aite, pro'lly you guys wanted to see a prove about me being a writer.
This blog, I wanted to show you one of my screen-play. But, a'ah.. I wouldn't allow you to see all my works.
(Sorryyy... XD)
So, I just give you the prolog of the pilot of one of my series: MY PRIVATE NOTE.
Well then, be Pleased.. & Enjoy my writing :D
These are my imaginary casts of MY PRIVATE NOTE.. huhuhuhu.. XD
MY PRIVATE NOTE - PILOT
Created and written by Natalia Pratiwi
FADE IN
DRAWER POV: A boy and a girl, bringing their own sheet of paper, standing on a stage.
NATALIE MCLANE, a 15 year old girl, beautiful dark long hair girl with a worried expression, standing face to face with her partner.
KRIS WOOD, a 16 year old boy, charming boy with a spirited expression, go deep down into his character toward hers.
NATALIE MCLANE
“Why?! In the name of Mother of Earth – Why you can’t rescue the Brother of Yours?!”
KRIS WOOD
“For I have chosen, My Love! Either him stay being the eternity prisoner of York or I have to leave you being the slavery wife of that evil King!”
NAT
“So you help me instead of your brother of blood?!”
KRIS
“I’m helping you for that I know you shall not be persisted serving all weirdest will from that Evil Man!”
NAT
“I will! I’m just serving him! Your Brother will be tortured for live!”
KRIS
“Well I won’t see you serving him!”
NAT
“Why?!”
KRIS
“Because I Love You!”
NAT
(gaps!) – (long pause)
“…but I love your brother.”
KRIS
“I know… but you will love me.”
Kris is go closer to her right away, holding both of her cheeks and ready to kiss her.
NAT
Ho’howkay!.. (avoiding immediately)/
DIRECTOR
CUT!
Kris seems disappointed about not kissing her, and the director, once again, putting his ‘lazy-mad’ expression toward Natalie.
DIRECTOR
What was that?
NAT
W’well, I assumed that we have to save the ‘kissing part’ away for a real stage, so that we really can embrace it more later. You know?.. (making unwilling smile)
DIRECTOR
Well I assumed that your whole speech about ‘embrace thing’ is bullsh*t. There’s something goin’ on between you two and you brought it in here – And thank’s to you, we have to do it all over again – wasting another time – and everyone get back on a stage, please!!
The casts are walking up the stage with their lazy place.
DIRECTOR
And Kris – you kiss her up real nice! Okay?!
KRIS
I will, Sir.
NAT
(sigh…)
DIRECTOR
Alright, 1… 2… …ACTION!/
TEEET!!... à (Bell’s ringing)
NAT
Aaw! Time’s up! Bummer… (Fake disappointed)
KRIS
(sigh…)
DIRECTOR
Hoow…kay… well Don’t forget tomorrow same place – same time! And Nobody bringing their script on a stage! MUST – KNOW – EVERY SINGLE WORD!..
Everyone starts preparing to leave.
Kris is taking his jacket and bag so quickly while seeing Nat in the other side is in a rush to get out of the building.
KRIS
(shouting)
Nat!
But Nat has already walked out the door, so Kris is chasing her immediately.
EXT. FRONT YARD OF OPERA HALL, LUTHERAN HIGH SCHOOL, MINNESOTA – DAY
Kris still tries to catch Nat, while Nat keeps walking faster without looking back.
KRIS
Nat! Wait up!
Nat still doesn’t wanna look back.
KRIS
Nat! (Grabbing her arm!)
NAT
(cutting – turn around)
Can you not Read the Sign that I am avoiding you now?!/
KRIS
Yes, I can. But why?!
NAT
W’..why?!.. Last night? You kissed me? All the sudden?! Have you lost your memories?/
KRIS
W’yes I know, that’s why I wanted to talk to you right now! I wanna explain it./
NAT
(sigh) you know what – don’t have to. I get it.
KRIS
What?
NAT
You are still crushed by Mary – there I was tryna comfort you – but I guess you were a little too comforted by me – I was at the wrong time and a wrong place and Boom! Accident Happen./
KRIS
Nat./
NAT
(cutting)
I know it – I understand – But still, we can’t hide the truth that there’s some awkwardness feeling between us now! So I’m sorry if I wanted to avoid seeing you now until ‘this’-strange kinda thing- fading out and we can get back as being friend all over again – alright?/
KRIS
Nat it wasn’t an accident!
NAT
(making confuse looks)
…what? You’ve been planned to choose me as your ‘runaway partner’? How dare you! I’m your best-friend!/
KRIS
No! It wasn’t like that!/
NAT
You can choose a thousand girls out here for you to get over Mary! But Me?! How could you do that to me?!/
KRIS
Because I Love you!
Nat’s heart just stops beating. Shocked by what she has just heard from her best friend’s mouth.
KRIS
… I love you./
NAT
(cutting)
You know that’s not an easy word to say../
KRIS
I know, cuz I’ve thought about it a long time ago./
NAT
A long time ago? 3 days after you broke up was ‘A long time ago’ for you?!/
KRIS
W’ of course not after I broke up! It was way beyond that!/
NAT
W’ this’s ridiculus. (chuckling) You don’t love me.
KRIS
Well how can you be so sure of that?/
NAT
Because – Wood – LOVE doesn’t exist in our Ages!.. What I believe is we just know Lust not Love!
KRIS
W’he… (chuckling) it’s my feeling – you don’t know that./
NAT
Well you’re feeling is wrong! Okay?! You can’t just know that you love somebody without having some long relationship first. That’s absurd!/
KRIS
Oh really?/
NAT
Really!/
KRIS
Are you sure?/
NAT
Very!/
KRIS
Well how about this – He likes that someone from the first time he saw her face - And along with times he starts to adore her attitude – her character – her laughs and that feeling just starts to grow inside of him, secretly – but he can’t let that out! Because she was with another guy back then and it seems like serious at the time.
NAT
(just listen)
…
KRIS
And then he decided to move on, met with a girl, try to connect with her… …Damn, but then you broke up with him..
Nat just keeps silent.
KRIS
…Nat you didn’t know how happy yet.. confuse I was after I found out about your break ups.. wanting to let that out quickly but hasn’t had a gut to come clean on Marry… …but I did anyway. …I made the decision…
Nat starts to believe and feel what Kris feels for her..
KRIS
…I wanted to set my mind free… I wanted you to know… that this whole time… I can’t take my attention off of you… just try to hide that feeling…
Nat just looks down, doesn’t know how to react..
KRIS
…I love you, Natalie. …I always do/
NAT
(cutting)
Wood I can’t..
This time, Kris’s heart is he one to stop beating.
KRIS
..why?/
NAT
Because, ..(gagging).. we were best-friend already and I can’t/
KRIS
That’s not a right reason for you to try/
NAT
It is – to me, Wood./
KRIS
See I just love how you’re the only one who calls me Wood../
NAT
Ok Kris./
KRIS
(sigh..)/
NAT
I just don’t wanna ruin our friendship. I don’t wanna change this situation – because it will./
KRIS
Change to a better situation./
NAT
Better or worst –Trust me, it’s still not worth it for ruining this friendship thing.
Kris just doesn’t wanna listen more to her opinions.
NAT
…I’m sorry but we can’t do this.
Kris is looking right through her, with disappointed look.. Then, Nat starts to turn around again and continuing her walks, but first he turn around again.
NAT
And I think we have to add more time for loosing the awkward moment.. between us.. (muttering) …
Then she starts to walk away again, leaving Kris with a more broken hearted.
FADE TO:
INT. CORRIDOR HALL, LHS – DAY – CONTINUES
Students are walking around the corridor, chatting around, before the bell starts to split them up. Natalie, accompanied by JESSICA CARTER (16), her best-friend, are walking together through a hall.
NAT
I mean, don’t you get it? It’s gonna be awkward, isn’t it?! I just can’t see his face in the same feeling right now.
JESSICA CARTER
(chuckles)
Love feeling for exact../
NAT
Seriously, Jess. (offended face)/
JESSICA
I’m sorry, (still chuckles) I too still can’t believe that he actually said those words to you. But I thought you’ve sensed that a long time ago! I mean I sense that, even Shawn senses that!/
NAT
Shawn senses that??/
JESSICA
We’re always gossiping you whenever you both are not around./
NAT
Ah – that’s just evil./
JESSICA
No that’s enjoying. (chuckling) So, what’re you gonna do now?
NAT
(sigh)
I don’t know.. stick with the plan I guess.. ‘Avoiding time’.
JESSICA
Ha’.. Good luck with that..
And finally, they arrive at their own lockers, and get shocked! with something written on Nat’s Locker that says:
BEWARE:
BOYFRIEND STEALER
OVER
HERE!
NAT
(jaw drops – rage looks)
Oh – My – God..
Jessica’s also really stunned yet try to hold the laugh, while each person who comes passing by are chuckling seeing that announcement stick in Nat’s locker.
After shocking, Nat immediately comes to her senses and rip that paper off her locker furiously.
NAT
This – is Ridiculus! Boyfriend stealer?! Who made this crap?!
JESSICA
(taking and reading the paper once again)
Who else could’ve been?
NAT
Ah – I know that Marry is not all ‘angel’.. she always envy me for everything./
SHAWN FOSTER
Nope, Marry doesn’t involve. It’s Kelly and the Gang.
Came out of nowhere, SHAWN FOSTER (16), one of them best-friend also, suddenly has already stand up and lay over beside Nat’s locker.
NAT
How’d you know that?
SHAWN
I saw them gluing it.
JESSICA
You saw/.. (cut - chuckles upset) and why didn’t you pull it off right away you idiot!?/
NAT
I’m your cousin for God Sake!/
SHAWN
Hey-hey-hey! Attacking me no more ladies! I kinda make your name less-humiliated anyway.
JESSICA
How? (un-trust looks)
SHAWN
Well did you notice a scratch right after the “here” word, down here?
Jessica and Nat see the scratch that Shawn pointed out.
SHAWN
They actually wrote a word ‘Slut’ for you, but I erase it already. Hehe… (smile proudly)
Jessica and Nat just can do the lazy stare with each other..
JESSICA
Seriously, you should’ve shown whenever God is giving a brain for Human race./
NAT
And of course Marry wouldn’t come and stick this thing by her self, she got dignity to safe. So she asked her follower to do her ‘nasty job’! Oh I really gotta clean my name for this!
JESSICA
Well chill out!.. it’s not like you really steal Kris from Marry, right?
SHAWN
You’re not?/
KELLY ABIGAIL
(cutting)
Yes, you are!
And suddenly, the so called ‘Gossip Gang’, KELLY ABIGAIL (16), CASSIE KEYS (16), and MEAGHAN JETTA GELLAR (15) are coming closer and confronting Nat.
KELLY
She only needed 2 days everyone for making some dirty move and kissing that poor cute guy Kris Wood, at your porch, Last night!
NAT
(gaps!)/
EVERYONE AROUND
Ooh… (judging looks)/
SHAWN
Really?/
JESSICA
Shut up. (murmuring)/
NAT
I am not-stealing him! And how did you know about last night?!
CASSIE KEYS
So it is true, isn’t it?/
KELLY
You are such a Tramp! Stealing Kris from our Bestie: Marry?! Everyone agree that they are a fit couple! And you just slip right in a middle and ruining their relationship!/
CASSIE
You should be ashamed of yourself, Missy!
Meanwhile, Shawn can’t just throw a good opportunity to have chitchat with his beloved crush, Meaghan.
SHAWN
(Low voice)
H’Hi.. Meaghan.. (smile anxiously)
MEAGHAN
Hi… (smile graciously)
SHAWN
Nice earrings..
MEAGHAN
Thank’s! I’ve bought it yesterday../
NAT
Look – He was the one who kissed me! I did not steal anyone’s boyfriend, okay?!/
JESSICA
Yeah and this is really none of your business, Gossip Gang!/
KELLY
Ah – does anyone order you to open your mouth?/
JESSICA
No – but I don’t have to take an order to sew your trash mouth!/
CASSIE
Hey watch your mouth, Male! You sew her mouth I sew you back!/
JESSICA
Oh like you dare?!/
CASSIE
You wanna piece of me?!/
JESSICA
You wanna Piece of me?!/
MATT KUTCHER
Hey-hey-hey!! Wait a minute!
Suddenly (again), the football guys, MATT KUTCHER (17), MARIO DAVID (16), ROBERT KLEIN (16), and CHASE BYRNE (16), arrive @ the crime scene and ready to rumble the fight.
MATT
Just hold up Girls.. (turn around at everyone) OK I CALL FOR JESSICA! Who’s gonna win the fight?!/
EVERYONE
Cassie!.. YEAH!.. Hahaha..! Jessica’s gonna beat her!../
CASSIE
You’re going down!/ (Push Jessica!)
JESSICA
You’re going even down! (Do the same thing!)
And there it is, a corridor hall becomes so crowded over a cat fight between them girls, the guys are just laughing and enjoying the girl fight! Jess and Cassie are showing who’s stronger between them while Nat and Kelly start to argue all over again!
SHAWN
Probably we should back off for a little while.. (take a chance to holding Meaghan)
MEAGHAN
I guess…
But that scenery fight will come to an end while MARY ELIZABETH DUNST (16), with a badge of Student Body President stick to her chest, finally shows and try to meddling the fight.
MARY ELIZABETH DUNST
Hey-hey! Stop it-stop it! Stop it you guys!! Silent everyone!..
With her powerful charm, everybody just start to shut up and follow her order.
MARY
(sigh) what’s goin on in here?!
NAT
Oh, like you don’t know.
MARY
If I know then I wouldn’t ask, would I?/
JESSICA
Just look at that. (giving the paper a bit rudely)
Mary then read the paper. And she looks a little bit embarrassed by that.
NAT
So, ready to come clean?
MARY
You think I made this kinda thing?/
NAT
Well of course No. (smile mockingly) You made them to make this kinda thing!
MARY
What?/
KELLY
(cutting)
We did it because we love you, Mary! We empathize your hurt feeling, that created by this tramp over here./
JESSICA
You just can’t shut your mouth, can’t you?/
CASSIE
And you just can’t stand still, can you?/
JESSICA
What are you – her bodyguard?!/
CASSIE
Hey!/
MARY
Ok-ok just shut up guys! No more fighting! (sigh…) look, I didn’t do it and I’m sorry if my friends are crossing the line but they’re just trying to defend me, alright?/
NAT
Defending you? Of what?! You know that this isn’t true!/
MARY
I’m just saying that this is just a misunderstanding! Everyone has their own amount of fault – and we just have to try to deal with this with a cold mind and heart./
NAT
Well what’d you mean ‘everyone has their own fault’?! What is my fault in this? I’m the victim here! They assaulted me!/
MARY
Yes I know – they gone too far - But they just try to defend their friend. Jessica would’ve done the same thing if it happens to you too./
NAT
Oh so you’re saying I did steal Wood from you?/
MARY
You’re the one who said it, I didn’t./
NAT
I can’t believe this – I know that you’re not entirely perfect – you just act like you’re good outside but inside you’re just the same with all your friends./
MARY
What’d you mean by that?!/
NAT
What I mean is You are a wolf covered with a sheep hair! You’re a hypocrite!/
KRIS
Hey!
AT LAST, the one who’s been talked about has arrived at the fight scene.
MARIO DAVID
The prince is here everyone! Clap you’re hand together!
EVERYONE
Yeeaaah!..
Everyone is just cheering up for Kris, while Kris just making a disturbed face, never like the attention that comes up for him.
KRIS
(sigh – low voice)
Can we just talk in a private place, just the three of us?
MARY
I think that’s a good idea../
NAT
(cutting)
No! We have to clarify my name first! Wood, tell them the truth! Do I really steal you from her?!/
EVERYONE
Yeah-yeah!.. We want the truth! Hahaha…/
KRIS
Ok – ok! (sigh) Nobody steal anyone in here, okay?! We broke up for our own reasons.
Slightly, Marry looks a bit disappointed.
NAT
And how about the kiss last night?
KRIS
(making a lazy looks toward Nat)
…I kissed her, not in return.
NAT
See?
EVERYONE
Oh…. (kinda bump that there’s no big conflict again to cheer up)
NAT
And please, tell your ex-girlfriend to not making such lame rumors again./
MARY
Oh for God sake I didn’t do it! Do you trust me Kris?
KRIS
(looking at Mary)
…(thinking for a second)… I’m sorry Nat, but Mary wouldn’t do that kinda thing.
Nat just can’t believe how Kris is believing Mary more than her.
MARY
See?.. thank you, by the way..
NAT
…Well look, even you still try to defend her, right?/
KRIS
Nat, it’s not about that../
NAT
He… (sarcastic chuckle) you know what – you didn’t even bother to have that speech this morning. (pause)… You’re still gonna choose her anyway.
KRISS
(sigh) Nat!/
Nat just gives ‘talk to my hand’ sign and just start leaving the fight scene right away.
KELLY
Okay – bye-bye Loser! Haha…/
JESSICA
Shut up! (really disturb)
KELLY
W don’t tell me to shut up! You shut up/
JESSICA
No You shut up!/
KELLY
Shut up!/
JESSICA
Shut – UP!/
KELLY
Shut up 1000 times!/
JESSICA
Shut up a million times!!/
KELLY
You/
EVERYONE
SHUT UP!!
FADE TO:
MY PRIVATE NOTE TITLE SEQUANCE
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Aite Peeps..!
So that was the example of my screen writing :D
what d'you think?
Good? Bad? Nice? Real Nice?..
Oh Come On peeps! Just be honest!.. lol.. XD
Anyhooo..
I hope that gives ya'll the prove of me being a writer.
I know.. (smile proudly, somboooooong)
Well, I hope you like it, or pro'lly you'll get some learning seeing my screen play.
So take care peeps, see ya in my next blog.
BEST REGARD,
natnat.instyle
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